This my second paper’s final draft. This is a compare and contrast paper which is about Women’s equality in British tennis.
For this time writing, I tried to improve my thesis sentences and statement, make it more clear and specific. In this version, instead of using two sentences to be my thesis sentence, I enrichment into one sentence. Different from my first draft, I tried to write in the correct APA style. Still, I was working on grammar, trying to write it all correct.
Women fight equality for so many years, in different fields. When we rediscovering the past, we can see, there were so many efforts that our formers did in the past. Without their work, things will be different now. We need to remember and keep on fighting on our equality.